Haiku, one line at a time 3
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 19 years ago
solaced in silence
awaiting earths warm embrace
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 19 years ago
solaced in silence
awaiting earths warm embrace
the leaves have fallen

sweet redolent death
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 19 years ago
sweet redolent death
bearing seeds for spring rebirth
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Posted by Heath H (+650) 19 years ago
sweet redolent death
bearing seeds for spring rebirth
grow to die again

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stars of the heavens
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 19 years ago
stars of the heavens
tempt mine eye like ripened grapes
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 19 years ago
stars of the heavens
tempt mine eye like ripened grapes
clear bursting perfect
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synchronicity
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Posted by Heath H (+650) 19 years ago
synchronicity
obtuse dimensions align
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 19 years ago
synchronicity
obtuse dimensions align
bringing calm to dark
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darkness longs for light
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Posted by Jill Rizk (+49) 19 years ago
darkness longs for light
the eclipse makes darker still
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Posted by sean bolton (+20) 19 years ago
darkness longs for light
the eclipse makes darkner still

calming before the light

[This message has been edited by sean bolton (edited 11/15/2003).]

[This message has been edited by sean bolton (edited 11/15/2003).]
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 19 years ago
darkness longs for light
the eclipse makes darkner still
calming before the light
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Welcome Sean, When you finish a haiku, feel free to start a new one. I will get this one going.
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Unheard daybreak cry
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Posted by sean bolton (+20) 19 years ago
unheard daybreak cry
snowflake softly lands
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 19 years ago
I will edit to haiku (5, 7, 5 syllables ) and thanks for hangin' with us Sean. Welcome!

unheard daybreak cry
snowflake arrives softly lands
deepening silence
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Restful time comes soft
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Posted by sean bolton (+20) 19 years ago
restful time comes soft
as buddahs tears gently roll
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 19 years ago
restful time comes soft
as budda's tears gently roll
to crickets night song
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Thunder brings morning
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Posted by sean bolton (+20) 19 years ago
thunder brings morning
echoes across the ocean
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Posted by Heath H (+650) 19 years ago
thunder brings morning
echoes across the ocean
rolling among waves
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Sunday morning blue
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Posted by Antonia Klein (+40) 19 years ago
Sunday morning blue
the sky casts its beam
as Venus commands

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a crescendo of desire



[This message has been edited by Antonia Klein (edited 11/18/2003).]
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[This message has been edited by Heath H (edited 11/18/2003).]
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 19 years ago
felt coursing through veins
a crescendo of desire
bubbles on the flesh

a black sky's ablaze
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Posted by Karen Stevenson (+46) 19 years ago
A black sky's ablaze
streaking sun-ergized ions
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 19 years ago
A black sky's ablaze
streaking sun-ergized ions
shade's gone, nature's razed

poor smiles warped and numb
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 19 years ago
Good afternoon poets. I have been down with the "Pain In The Ass Computer Blues" the last couple of weeks and am enjoying catching up on communications.

This is just a reminder for those who are not aware. Haiku is a very structured form of Japanese poetry that follows a five syllable, then seven syllable, then ends with five syllables for a total of seventeen. The subject matter traditionally is nature. If you finish one start a new one.
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poor smiles warped and numb
backs turned from the blazing sun


[This message has been edited by Tucker Bolton (edited 11/26/2003).]
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Posted by li cran (+31) 19 years ago
poor smiles warped and numb
backs turned from the blazing sun
arid thirst chars throats


petal bending down
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 19 years ago
petal bending down
heads bowed to winters power (welcome, li cran)
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Posted by li cran (+31) 19 years ago
petal bending down
heads bowed to winters power
promised future hues.

(Couldn't resist finishing this myself....sorry.)

colors glowing cold
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 19 years ago
colors glowing cold
northern lights celestial frame
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Posted by li cran (+31) 19 years ago
colors glowing cold
northern lights celestial frame
sparkling crystal sun

(pronounce 'spark-ling'...not sparkeling...)

radiant crystals



I always enjoyed a chained haiku, but when I introduced it to a poetry group thousands of years ago around age 15, they all thought it was an 'odd and interesting' novelty. Hope it isn't so original anymore...
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 19 years ago
radiant crystals
reflecting winter sunlight
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Posted by Heath H (+650) 19 years ago
radiant crystals
reflecting winter sunlight
prism galaxy

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just below the snow
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 19 years ago
just below the snow
a severed frostbitten toe
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 19 years ago
just below the snow
a severed frostbitten toe
longing for a foot
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northern lights dancing
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 19 years ago
northern lights dancing
gradating souls wearing dreams
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 19 years ago
northern lights dancing
gradating souls wearing dreams
search in vain for rest
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Tears of salt and rain
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 19 years ago
Tears of salt and rain
the eyes' unbiased children
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Posted by Lee Akers (+269) 19 years ago
Tears of salt and rain
The tears of unbiased children
Cry for Miles City
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 18 years ago
remote like the night
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
bodies burned on distant shore
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 18 years ago
remote like the night
bodies burned on distant shores
smoke signals for god

existential breadth
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Posted by Lee Akers (+269) 18 years ago
Breathed serene
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
existential breadth
undulating oily void

Lee, first verse five, second seven, third five.
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Posted by Lee Akers (+269) 18 years ago
Existential breadth
Undulating oily void
Sat breathing serene.


Two loving children
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 18 years ago
two loving children
twenty-four frames per second
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
two loving children
twenty-four frames per second
black and white laughter

Placid funky blues
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Posted by Craig Bolton (+41) 18 years ago
Placid Funky Blues
Crystal Blue Persuation
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Posted by Karen Stevenson (+46) 18 years ago
Placid funky blues
Crystal Blue Persuasion
Sets my soul smilin'.

Purple Sage Riders

[This message has been edited by Karen Stevenson (edited 11/21/2004).]
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
Purple Sage Riders
motorcycles in a pack
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Posted by Lee Akers (+269) 18 years ago
Purple Sage riders
Motorcycles in a pack
Poor old Foy Willing



Honkytonk refrain
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
Honkytonk refrain
violin crying the blues
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Posted by rosemary (+61) 18 years ago
Honkytonk Refrain
Violin crying the blues
Blue Oyster Cult sings
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Green papaya friut
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 18 years ago
Green Papaya Fruit
Mangled Between Yellow Teeth
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
Green Papaya Fruit
Mangled Between Yellow Teeth
Floss, floss, must have floss!!!!
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Toothless Hillbilly (thanks for the mental image, Pulmonade.)
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 18 years ago
Toothless Hillbilly
Gots the Chops on Air Banjo
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
Toothless Hillbilly
Gots the Chops on Air Banjo
apocryphal waltz
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Big river runs red
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Posted by rosemary (+61) 18 years ago
Big river runs red
Boiling,foamy full of death
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Posted by Chad (+1761) 18 years ago
Big river runs red
Boiling, foamy full of death
Turbine ground salmon

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Dark morning can't rise


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Haiku question: Is there also supposed to be some sort of rhyming involved, in addition to the 5-7-5 syllable format?

[This message has been edited by Chad (edited 11/29/2004).]
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
Chad,

No, the visual image is what matters. Your "Turbine ground salmon" ain't a bad example.

In the Japanese tradition, to strive for a lovely mental image or story is the goal, as a rule.
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
Dark morning can't rise
dream vision fills my slumber
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Posted by Chad (+1761) 18 years ago
Sand grinds my red eyes

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Red moon lights the night
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Posted by Lee Akers (+269) 18 years ago
Red Moon lights the night
It must be L.A
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 18 years ago
Red Moon Lights the Night
It Must Be Los Angeles
Stars below the smog

transient pleasure
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Posted by Gunnar Emilsson (+18634) 18 years ago
Transient pleasure
Fat bucks hanging on gambrels
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
Transient pleasure
Fat bucks hanging on gambrels
natures bounty gift
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Winters sunset pause
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 18 years ago
Winters Sunset Pause
Reduced to my Pride and Guilt
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Posted by Chad (+1761) 18 years ago
Transient Pleasure
Bums drink from a paper bag


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Sorry, goofed the thread up- thought maybe it would insert above.

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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
No problem Chad, just getting back on track.
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Winters Sunset Pause
Reduced to my Pride and Guilt
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Posted by Chad (+1761) 18 years ago
Winters Sunset Pause
Reduced to my Pride and Guilt
In the land of Oz


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Hidden truths fear light
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Posted by Gunnar Emilsson (+18634) 18 years ago
Hidden truths fear light
Firefighters' excessive costs
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Posted by Sharon Lee Willing (+10) 18 years ago
I think my husband, Foy Willing, would have gotten a big kick out of this. I take it you are a fan.

Sharon Lee Willing
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Posted by Chad (+1761) 18 years ago
I'm going to start fresh, since we got a bit off track and I don't want to get political here. I prefer the visionary thing, anyway....

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Fog draped redwoods high
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
Fog draped redwoods high
banana slug silver trail

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Thanks Chad. Gunnar, I always enjoy your insight, wit and wisdom. Perhaps this is not the right thread for things politic.
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Posted by Lee Akers (+269) 18 years ago
Fog draped redwoods high
Banana Slug silver trail
Love note in the shade.


Snowy mountain peaks
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Posted by Gunnar Emilsson (+18634) 18 years ago
Sniff...I will finish my own dang haiku!

Hidden truths fear light
Firefighters' excessive costs
A mayor's furrowed brow.

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Snowy mountain peaks
Elk bugle in the distance
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Posted by Chad (+1761) 18 years ago
Snowy mountain peaks
Elk bugle in the distance
Through dead-fall we crawl

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Train whistle bellows
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Posted by Lee Akers (+269) 18 years ago
Train whistle bellows
lulling the children to sleep
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Posted by rosemary (+61) 18 years ago
And shaking the house
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summertime dreaming

[This message has been edited by rosemary (edited 12/8/2004).]
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 18 years ago
Summertime dreaming
lest I cannot bear myself
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
Summertime dreaming
lest I cannot bear myself
lifes lone escapment
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angels nightmare scream (P, I can't wait to see where you take this)
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 18 years ago
angels nightmare scream
own the darkness, sell the light
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
angels nightmare scream
own the darkness, sell the light
awake to silence
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Thumbing west at dawn
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Posted by Chad (+1761) 18 years ago
Thumbing west at dawn
Bug's dead, transaxle is gone
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Posted by Larry Antram (+181) 18 years ago
Thumbing west at dawn
Bug's dead, transaxle is gone
Don't rhyme, it is wrong



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Dragging the downtown

[This message has been edited by Larry Antram (edited 12/12/2004).]
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
Dragging the downtown
main street lights each turn green
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Posted by Gunnar Emilsson (+18634) 18 years ago
Dragging the downtown
main street lights each turn green
casinos glitter.

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Whiskey on the rocks
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 18 years ago
Whiskey on the rocks
coax the living from the life
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Posted by Lee Akers (+269) 18 years ago
Whiskey on the rocks
coax the living from the life
The hot burn of death



Smoke from behind the old barn

[This message has been edited by Lee Akers (edited 12/13/2004).]

[This message has been edited by Lee Akers (edited 12/14/2004).]
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
Lee, if you dump the "from" or "old" you will be on track. Five, Seven, Five.
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Posted by Lee Akers (+269) 18 years ago
Smoke out back of the barn
Corn silk or some other herb
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
Smoke out back of the barn
Corn silk or some other herb
intense colors the sunset
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southbound snow-flecked bird
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 18 years ago
southbound snow-flecked bird
one less friend, one more goodbye
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
southbound snow-flecked bird
one less friend, one more goodbye
winters heartless curse
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mornings warm caress
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Posted by Lee Akers (+269) 18 years ago
Mornings warm caress
Blankets like a sweet cocoon
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Posted by Chad (+1761) 18 years ago
Mornings warm caress
Blankets like a sweet cocoon
Glistening smooth skin

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Neon stop ahead
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Posted by rosemary (+61) 18 years ago
Neon stop ahead
Gambling,pleasure or pain
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Posted by Lee Akers (+269) 18 years ago
Neon stop ahead
Gambling,pleasure or pain
Miles City's main street



Bells are ringing now

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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
Bells are ringing now
tolling joy or portend doom
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 18 years ago
Bells are ringing now,
tolling joy or portend doom,
know knowing is not

Whom makes the bed here
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 18 years ago
Whom makes the bed here
covering the shameless night
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 17 years ago
Whom makes the bed here
covering the shameless night
to steal all the coins

hot trails to the brain
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Posted by Hal Neumann (+10369) 17 years ago
Hot trails to the brain
stimulate, invigorate
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Posted by Betty Emilsson (+71) 17 years ago
Hot trails to the brain
Stimulating, invigorating
Then poof, they are gone.
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 17 years ago
First snowfall blankets
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Posted by Richard Bonine, Jr (+15535) 17 years ago
First snowfall blankets
brings thoughts of the Verde valley
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Posted by Salli (Scanlan) Starkey (+232) 17 years ago
Greetings from Cottonwood, heart of the Verde Valley.
Yes, we have no snow here! (sorry I interrupted)
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 17 years ago
First snowfall blankets
brings thoughts of the Verde valley
terra cotta shards

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Mystic vortex winds
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 17 years ago
Mystic vortex winds
Sublimating apathy
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Posted by Tucker Bolton (+3882) 17 years ago
Mystic vortex winds
Sublimating apathy
Pulmonade returns

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Visions of darkness
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Posted by Hal Neumann (+10369) 17 years ago
Visions of darkness
while civility suffers
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Posted by pulmonade (+121) 17 years ago
Visions of darkness
while civility suffers
phones ringing off hooks

her supple thin frame
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Posted by Shu (+1792) 15 years ago
her supple thin frame
makes my hormones course through veins
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